THE THAT PROBLEM
Today, an advanced copy of another magazine--a fierce rival of the first--arrived with another feature article of mine in it, and it looked great with all the graphics, though I was disappointed it wasn't the cover story. (All right, I shouldn't be so greedy.") I read the article just as soon as it arrived, as I know how things can pile up. To my surprise, this one read pretty well too, except for one problem. Or actually two problems: To save space, the word "that" was removed from two sentences. Afterwards, the sentences read poorly, little snags in an another seamless tapestry. Two minor rough spots in an 8-page article shouldn't be enough to ruin your day--unless you happen to be a fastidious stickler like me, that is. Or should I say--with the "that" removed to save space--"a fastidious stickler like me is."

